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From: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>
Date: Wed, Apr 27, 2011 at 2:02 PM
Subject: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>

Hi David,

Just a quick follow-up. I sent you a couple of emails. Did you get them? (they may be in your junk email folder). The emails had information about a possible Merit Scholarship of $17,000 per academic year for the Fall 2011 full-time program based on your LSAT and undergraduate GPA. I didn't hear back from you.

This is a great time to apply for Fall 2011. (The application is up on LSAC and your fee is waived). Our scholarship budget changes throughout the recruitment cycle. I recommend that you apply early to qualify for the award mentioned above.

Let me know if you have questions or need more information. I look forward to seeing your application.

Susan

Susan ********
Assistant Director of Admissions
******* School of Law

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From: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>
Date: Wed, Apr 27, 2011 at 7:04 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>

Hi Susan,

I have not made up my mind about which law school I am going to attend just yet. I do not know much about your school, except that it is located in Arizona. I am intrigued by this scholarship offer because it would be much easier on me financially, but I am a little hesitant about going to a school in Arizona because I am very fair skinned. Could you provide some more information about the school?

Thanks,

Dave

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From: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>
Date: Thurs, Apr 28, 2011 at 11:23 AM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>

Hi Dave,

It is good to hear from you. Your scholarship is awarded at the time of acceptance. It is based on your application as a whole, so it's important to submit your personal statement, two letters of recommendation, and resume promptly. No additional scholarship application is needed. The merit scholarship is divided between the Fall 2011 and Spring 2012 full -time day program. (It's renewable each year provided you maintain a 3.0 GPA). More information will be provided in the Enrollment and Scholarship agreement.

Please feel free to take a look at our website for course listing, tuition costs, faculty bios, and general information about ******* School of Law.

If you have any questions or would like to take a tour please do not hesitate to contact me. I look forward to hearing from you.

Susan

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From: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>
Date: Thurs, Apr 28, 2011 at 1:55 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>

Hi Susan,

I have checked out the school's website and feel that ******* School of Law would be a great fit for me. The only problem is that I get sunburnt very easily and, although I have never been to Arizona, I hear that the sun is dangerously strong there. In fact, my great grandfather passed away only 3 months after he moved to Arizona, and although the autopsy said otherwise, I suspect that it was due to sun poisoning. Are there things to do around the school that do not involve being out in the sun all day? What is the social life like for students? Your insight would be greatly appreciated in helping me make my decision.

Thank you,

Dave

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From: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>
Date: Thurs, Apr 28, 2011 at 2:44 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>

Dave,

Just like any city, there are opportunities to do things both indoors and outdoors. Most students spend their time outside of class studying.

Susan

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From: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>
Date: Thurs, Apr 28, 2011 at 9:11 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>

Susan,

Thank you for your insight. It was VERY helpful. Since learning that there are things to do both indoors and outdoors in *******, I think I will now be attending ******* School of Law. I will be submitting my personal statement as well as my letters of recommendation shortly. Is there a page limit for the personal statement? The prologue alone is already over a page and I wanted to make sure I didn't run over the page limit.

Thank you,

Dave

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From: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>
Date: Fri, Apr 29, 2011 at 1:08 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>

Hi Dave,

Attached is the tip sheet for the personal statement. The requested page limit is between two and four pages, double-spaced Times New Roman 12pt font.

Susan

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From: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>
Date: Fri, Apr 29, 2011 at 2:17 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>

Hi Susan,

Thank you for including the tip sheet. I am currently trying to condense my personal statement to fit within the page limit. I tend to be a little long winded! Do you think there would be a problem if the statement were single-spaced instead of double-spaced? I only ask because I am writing about how I have overcome adversity and I feel that there would be crucial things about my life (i.e. Growing up on the streets of Baltimore, having an alcoholic step-father, being ridiculed due to frequent sunburns, etc.) that I would have to leave out in order to keep it under the 4 page limit. Thank you for your help, and sorry for all of the questions!

Dave

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From: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>
Date: Fri, Apr 29, 2011 at 6:07 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>

If you are serious about applying to ******* School of Law, I would really attempt to follow the recommendations on page limit and formatting.

Susan

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From: Dave Trojanowski <*******@gmail.com>
Date: Fri, Apr 29, 2011 at 11:02 PM
Subject: RE: Fall 2011 Law Scholarship Offer
To: Susan ******** <********@*******law.edu>

Susan,

I am as serious as a sunburn about applying to ******* School of Law.

I have just submitted my application. I had to cut the prologue and the epilogue from my personal statement to fit within the page limit. What's left is the logue. Let me know what kind of scholarship I get. See ya in the Fall.

Dave

Personal Statement:

A few years ago, Converse ran a great commercial featuring basketball superstar, Dwayne Wade, which showed different clips of Wade falling hard on the basketball court throughout his career. After each time he fell, they showed Wade getting up and used the old Japanese Proverb "Fall Seven Times, Stand Up Eight" as their slogan. This has since become my motto in life (except I say "Fall Seven Times, Stand Up Seven" because that just makes more sense. If you fall seven times, why would you stand up eight times? You would stand up seven times. I have written letters to both Converse and the Japanese Proverb people about changing it to "Fall Down Seven Times, Stand Up Seven" but I have not received a response to date). I like this commercial so much because it is all about overcoming adversity. Clearly, Dwayne Wade has some kind of disability that makes it difficult for him to stay on his feet. And yet, somehow, someway, he musters up the courage after every fall to stand up and continue playing a game that he gets paid millions of dollars for. He's truly an inspiration - a hero. He follows this motto in a literal sense whereas I follow it metaphorically. I do not actually fall to the ground much (I have terrific balance and I spend the majority of my time in a sitting or lying position). To me, "falling" means battling some kind of adversity in life and "standing up" means overcoming that adversity. I will now tell you about the adversity that I have faced in my life. If at any point you feel the urge to cry, then please...cry.

I grew up in the suburbs about thirty minutes from Baltimore City. Baltimore is known for two things: crab cakes and crime. One of these things is very dangerous, and one of these things is delicious (although I do recall a story about a gentleman who choked on a crab cake and died. Ironically, it was a stolen crab cake. I do not know any more details. The authorities said it would be best to leave the case unsolved. It was very bizarre). Crime is not much of a problem where I live, but often times I feel as if I have actually had it tougher than the drug addicts who live in the projects. For example, there have been times when it has taken me OVER AN HOUR to get from my house to Camden Yards to watch the Orioles play. Traffic can be terrible here. Parking is also bad in the city. I have gotten several parking tickets for parking in illegal areas, which my parents reluctantly paid off. When faced with this kind of adversity, it's easy to see how most people would "fall down" and not go to Oriole games because of the traffic and parking. However, I "stand up" and continue to drive to games in my fully loaded Lexus. Adversity, 0. Me, 1.

Another painful aspect of my life that I have had to overcome is living with my step-father who is an alcoholic. Most people do not understand how serious alcoholism is until they live with someone who has this disease. My brother and I know firsthand just how hard this can be. He didn't beat us or anything like that. Oh, God no. Quite the opposite. He's actually a really nice guy. I would have preferred if he was like other alcoholics who just beat their kids. The problem with living with him was far worse than physical violence: he constantly wanted to party. All day, every day. It was very distracting. There were countless times when I would come home from school to find my step-dad and a bunch of his friends drinking beers poolside while rocking out to AC/DC. Imagine being 17 years old and having to turn down a beer bong (while "Highway to Hell" is blaring and a group of people are chanting your name) because you had homework to do. Talk about adversity. The memories still haunt me to this day.

Perhaps the most difficult thing that I have had to overcome is a rare skin condition that makes me extremely sensitive to the sun. Growing up with this horrible condition was very tough. If I went out in the sun for longer than two minutes at a time, I would get severely sunburnt. Kids would make fun of me. They would call me "Sunburn Boy." It got to the point where I had to stay out of the sun entirely, which prompted the kids in my school to give me the nickname "Vampire Boy." I know what you're thinking: "I saw Twilight, I watch True Blood. Vampires are cool!" Well, this was back in the early 2000's before the whole vampire craze (aren't you a little old to be watching that stuff anyway?). When I did have to go out in the sun, I would walk around with an umbrella to provide shade for myself ("Umbrella Boy" was born. My classmates were not very creative). Being constantly ridiculed due to my rare skin condition has helped me develop very thick, yet still extremely sensitive, skin. I would not be the person I am today had I not endured so much uncreative name-calling. It's like the old saying we have here in Baltimore: "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger. Except heroin."

In conclusion, I feel that my brutal upbringing has prepared me for anything I could face out there in the legal world. If you want someone who can handle adversity, I am your man. Please admit me into your school. I will now leave you with a Proverb that I just created:

"You want to knock me down seven times? Fine. Go right ahead. But just know...I will stand up seven times, not eight." ©

©Copyright Pending

Sincerely,

Dave Trojanowski


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